Writing Contest Blurb

I’m entering a writing contest and need a powerful under-300-word blurb to describe my story. What do you think of this? Suggestions?

Elizabeth has finally gotten free. Free of her abusive father. Free of the cruel fiancé he pledged her to. She fled her family’s medieval keep, risked the ruthless bandits which prowled her lands, and found a fresh start. In a few days she would arrive at a nunnery on England’s eastern shores. There she could begin again. She would finally put her sword skills to good use, acting as protector for the tranquil outpost.

When Richard’s moss-green eyes catch hers in the smoky depths of a tavern, Elizabeth treats him as she would every other man in her life–-as an imminent threat. Her instinct is to avoid all contact. Then a bedraggled orphan ends up tucked under her wing, and her protective instincts flare even higher.

But Richard is patient, tenderly attentive, all the things Elizabeth has craved but never thought possible. With the delicacy of a snowdrop unfurling after a bitter winter, her heart braves the most fleeting of hope.

He could be different.

Then Corwin strides in from her past. Her fiance’s cutting remarks and quick, bruising fist shatter her tenuous peace. Corwin’s grasping fingers drag her back toward the hell-hole she barely escaped to begin with.

Elizabeth must delve within herself to find hidden reserves of strength she never knew existed. Somehow she must find a way to stand against her family and Corwin-–and to claim the life she knows, deep down, that she deserves.

Do Not Complain Reboot 32 Day 2

Do Not Complain Reboot 32 Day 2 –

It was the mess that did me in this time. It seems to be either the mess or food that will get to me. Fri was a long day already, and a CraigsList person had decided he’d come out Sat at noon to pick up an old receiver we were selling. And the house was a complete mess. So, 2am, I’m trying to plow through quite a lot of mess just to get the living room and kitchen presentable. And I got a bit cranky :).

It frustrates me that the house gets to a state that we can’t even have people in just those two rooms without an extensive cleaning. But I’m unwilling to take time away from my already mountainous pile of projects in order to clean it. And Bob doesn’t like strangers in the house.

I guess what we need is a friend who will come in and handle the dishes and counters and such. And then we need to be more diligent about not using these areas as storage locations for months and months.

I admit that the kitchen table is completely covered with all my watercoloring supplies right now, especially as I’m working on a cool “palette” art contest where I have to turn a large wooden palette into a unique work of art. It has to be done by Feb 25th so I have 10 days left on that. Today I’m doing some experiments with folding vellum into origami.

Are you guys attempting mindfulness about complaints?